Monday, September 15, 2014

Querencia


 Finally after a long and stressful day of school, I am home. I kicked my shoes off, tossed my backpack, and crashed the bed. But the day wasn't over yet. Knowing that there's a pile of homework on my desk, I was forced to get up. From classes to papers and projects, my mind raced and soon had burst. Knowing that I've had enough, I dropped everything and escaped the stress.

I headed straight to my grandparent's room and lied comfortably beside my grandma. She patted my arm and smiled. My grandparents and I had no conversation. I stared at the photo collage on their closet and relived those captured moments. My worries began to slowly drift as I felt at ease. As the wind raced through the window screen, my eyes wandered toward the flying curtains. I closed my eyes and embraced the afternoon breeze. I now had been lured into a dream with no troubles.

I woke up feeling weightless. All my troubles were gone and were left in the past. I had regained my focus and my mind was able to function. I got up and went back to work. One after another, the pile of homework disappeared.

Reflecting back, I've realized that my grandparent's room was my retreat. The collage on their closet empties my worries and the feel of the light breeze entering the room clears my mind. Just lying in the comfort of the bed and the company of my grandma simply relaxed me. To me this isn't just my grandparent's room, it is more than that. It is my Querencia..











3 comments:

  1. This is a good essay I liked how you expressed yourself through your writing. There is also good sensory details in your writing and it flowed together really well. However, the part when you first entered your grandparents room I think you can be a little more specific on how you felt when the stress of homework was making you feel so stressed. Overall good essay

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  2. It was a great rough draft overall but there were a few mistakes. For example: "Finally after a long and stressful day of school, I am home. I kicked my shoes off, tossed my backpack, and crashed the bed." The was an error with the second sentence. ..." and crashed the bed." I understand what you're saying. Instead of "crash the bed" put crashed into bed. Also to your conclusion, you can add or compare your grandparents house to your mom/dad's house.

    Ronald Ishikawa

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  3. AS(2+) YOU GOT TO EXPLAIN ALL YOUR IDEAS MORE. TELL US WHY YOUR ROOM WASN'T ENOUGH AND WHY YOU HAD TO GO TO GRANDPARENTS ROOM. WHY THERE ROOM COMPARED TO EVERYWHERE ELSE. ALSO REVISE FIRST PARAGRAPH ADD MORE SENSORY DETAIL TO MAKE THE STORY COME ALIVE.

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