We were all born into this world to serve a purpose. Having the ability to think for ourselves, we make choices that will pave a sustainable path. To do so, we set our standards and we exceed them. James L. Weil's message in "A Coney Island Life" is to never settle for less because you don't want to regret the opportunities that you didn't take.
Time is limited and you don't get it back once it has passed. "My helium hopes break skyward without me" We set high standards for ourselves knowing that it won't be easy. You'll lose hope along the way but we need to regain it to continue on. "now arms fill with doll I threw so much for." The ending result is what we strive for because of all the effort and sacrifices that were made long the journey. Don't give up because of one mistake, but take & learn from it. All the hard work & dedication will pay off because it's what got you where you are now. Don't count the days, but make the days count. "how many more times round I have to catch the brass-ring sun before the game is up." You knot know exactly how much time you have. Therefore, do all that you can before the opportunity is taken away from you "I take perhaps my last ride on this planet carousel" This direct quote indicates that making choices should be decided as if there was no tomorrow. You thought that was it, but you actually have one last bit of chance left.
The motive behind your determination and hard work is life's ultimate goal. Happiness. Because we all strive for the great feeling of accomplishment.No one said that achieving goals was ever easy. Encountering faults and difficulties will always occur, but its our choice to face and overcome it. Surely sacrifices are made, but they all just prove its value and why you believed in it the first time.
I really like how you interpreted the poem! I noticed that the majority of your essay composes of you telling the reader how you should live life according to the essay rather than explaining why the lines you chose in the poem back your thesis statement up. Other than that, your essay is really strong, flows well, and is really interesting to read.Good job! :D
ReplyDeleteYour thesis really ties into the poem and I liked how in the middle of your poem you reverted back to the thesis (" Don't give up because of one mistake, but take & learn from it. All the hard work & dedication will pay off because it's what got you where you are now."), however, your conclusion doesn't tie back to your thesis. Your thesis is to never settle for less and your conclusion is mainly about facing your fears and whether or not you are successful doing so. Try and add a sentence somewhere in your conclusion that just restates your thesis. ("Never settle for less because you never know what could happen later on in the future. You might be benefitted by it or you may not.") or something along those lines. Otherwise this was a great draft!
ReplyDeleteAS(2) PLEASE REMEMBER YOU ARE NOT TALKING TO ANYONE WHEN WRITING A LITERARY ANALYSIS, YOU ARE HOLDING A DISCUSSION ABOUT YOUR THESIS AND USING EVIDENCE TO SUPPORT IT. SO PLEASE WRITE IN THIRD PERSON. REMEMBER THIS NEEDS TO BE 4 PARAGRAPHS NOT 3 (SO TWO BODY PARAGRAPHS). INTRODUCTION NEEDS TO INTRODUCE POEM AND GIVE SHORT SUMMARY BEFORE JUST STATING THESIS. ALSO CONCLUSION COULD BE STRONGER IN SUMMARY OF IDEAS DISCUSSED AND LASTING INSIGHT.
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